Simply Black and White

Half of the story is done. I am asking is people would help me to edit this half. Keep in mind that this is a childeren's book, so revise it as such. I'm not sure if the vocabulary matches (and I am appalled at my grammar). The other half will go up soon. Thank You! When you are done, you can e-mail it to me: pippenfree2003@yahoo.com

It was early morning one day at school. All of the kids were hustling around, so the teacher gathered them together and seated them on the floor.

After everyone was settled, the teacher asked, “Does anybody know what a hero is?”

Bobby Smith immediately raised his hand and said, “A hero is a firefighter.”

“Not quite. Nice try,” the teacher replied. “Anyone else?” The teacher glanced around the room.

“Policemen!”
“Doctors!”
“Superman!”
“Ambulance people!”
Many of the kids guessed, but to their amazement, Miss Bryan had a different idea than they did.

“All good guesses! However, a hero is someone who goes on a journey and comes back as a new person!”

Cindy interrupted, “Miss Bryan, how can I be someone else when I am myself? How can I be Bobby when I go on a journey?”

Miss Bryan stated, “Not quite of a change like that. A journey takes internal strength and there has to be a revelation at the end.”

The students looked up, slightly confused.

“Don’t worry. You’ll understand in time,” Miss Bryan said.

Miss Bryan reached back into her teaching bag and pulled out a pile of books. The kids were dazed at the enormity of the pile, but waited contently for the resolution to the question that the teacher posed.

However, Cindy was tired of waiting and wanted to draw her own conclusions. She immediately raised her hand and started talking. “Miss Bryan, we already know what a hero is. Those books can’t teach us anything that we don’t already know.”

“Settle down Cindy.” By this time Miss Bryan was fed up with the rudeness that Cindy was projecting, but she simply ignored the feeling and continued her explanation.

“A couple thousand years ago, heroes were portrayed very differently in society. They were often praised and rejoiced for their remarkable actions. Such is so in this book.” Miss Bryan held up an older book with crinkled edges and a fat coffee stain on the cover.
“This book is called ‘The Odyssey’. Within these pages, a war-hero, Odysseus, goes on a journey to find his way home. However, on the way he faced many unbearable tasks. Odysseus had to do such things as sailing through a whirlpool, escaping an island and going into the underworld. Luckily, throughout his journey, Odysseus kept his family and loved ones close to him, deep within the depths of his mind. That is what allowed him to complete all of his tasks and make it back to his home.”

The kids looked up to the teacher and wondered if firemen and doctors had to go on these journeys and complete such grueling tasks.

Bobby Smith politely raised his hand and asked that question, “Do firemen have to go on journeys?”

Miss Bryan didn’t look surprised that he asked that question. “Actually Bobby, you are quite a few steps ahead of me. Save that question and see if it gets answered shortly.”

Cindy sighed and shook her head.

Miss Bryan put down the old book and picked up a newer looking one. This one had fewer ripped pages and didn’t have a mark on the cover.

Miss Bryan continued her explanation of heroes, “In this book, which was written only a few years ago, a person by the name of Edward Bloom went on the same type of journey as Odysseus. He left his home and went through many trials to find his true self. On the way, he found his true love at a circus. Edward searched for many months and completed tasks just to find her again. This journey to find his love was a very mentally grueling task, but he made it through.”

Miss Bryan paused and glanced at the many hands that were raised during her last story. She decided to be polite and called on Cindy, who was actually waiting patiently to be called upon.

“Miss Bryan, Edward didn’t go on the same type of journey that Odysseus did, like you said. The journeys don’t sound anything alike, actually.”

“Very good observation Cindy,” Miss Bryan praised. She was mildly surprised that Cindy had something useful to say, rather than criticism. She continued explaining, “See, over time the hero’s journey changes, as society itself changes. It will be more apparent a little bit later.”

Miss Bryan reached to her left and pulled the final book off the pile. “Now, this hero is one of my favorites! He is what one would call the prime modern-day hero.” Miss Bryan paused in the moment, trying to gather her words. After the moment of reflection, she continued, “Now this may seem like forever ago, but it really wasn’t! In the early 1900’s, there were many conflicts over in Europe and Asia. Many people literally fought over resolutions, however this person took a more peaceful approach. Mahatma Gandhi chose silent protests and civil disobedience to get his point across. He always seemed to do it without making the smallest amount of violence. His heroic actions inspired many, even people today!”

Cindy wondered for a bit, and then raised her hand. “Miss Bryan, Gandhi didn’t go on a journey. He just stayed and practiced civil dis-en-something.”

Miss Bryan replied, “But Cindy, would you agree that he changed on the inside and influenced the lives of others?” Cindy nodded her head shyly. “That is exactly how the hero changed over time. Odysseus, who was older, had more of a physical approach to becoming a hero. He actually engaged in a journey and fought off people. Odysseus had many helpers too, as many heroes did.”

“While Edward Bloom was a fictional character and Gandhi was a real hero, both had a mental journey in which they endeavored. Bloom’s was a mental and physical journey while Gandhi fought off his demons and became at one with himself. ”

The children looked pleased. All loose ends seemed to be tied.

“Now, over the weekend, go home and start a journey. Try to overcome some type of obstacle, and it’s ok if you need help.” The bell rang.

On the bus ride home, Cindy and Bobby Smith had many ideas that raced through their heads.

And over the weekend, they went on a journey.

Then they arrived at school on Monday.

Immediately upon arrival, Bobby Smith and Cindy raced up to Miss Bryan and told her the stories of their heroic weekend.

“Miss Bryan, I went to my grandma’s house and helped her to clean out her garage! I am a hero!” Cindy said sounding accomplished.

“I was allowed to walk around my development! I saw that the park was littered, so my mom and I went into the area and picked up trash. I realized that it is bad to litter, because I saw a raccoon living in a shoebox. I am a hero!” Bryan sounded pleased.

However, Cindy refuted, “You can’t be a hero! You didn’t help anyone!”

Bryan answered, “I went on a mental process! You didn’t, so you are not a hero!”

Both turned to Miss Bryan and said together, “Miss Bryan, I am a hero…right?”

Miss Bryan chuckled softly and responded.

“Well…did either of you have any mentors that helped you to complete the journey?”

“My grandma!”
“My mom!”

“Did you have to overcome an obstacle?”

“A messy garage!”
“Litter!”

“And your actions helped for the betterment of society?”

“It helped my grandmother.”
“A clean environment is healthy for nature, which furthers society.”

Miss Bryan looked a bit puzzled as Bobby Smith said the last statement. It seemed as if he read it directly from a Nature Lover’s guide. However, she dismissed the idea and continued her conversation.

“And you both claim to have gone on a journey?” Both nodded. “Then I must say you have both fulfilled the requirements of being a hero. Cindy, you took the more physical approach that we have talked about yesterday. Remember Odysseus?” Miss Bryan turned her attention to Bobby Smith. “And Bobby, you went on both a physical and mental journey. You not only realized the importance of nature, but also took a stance and cleaned up the place. Good job!”

“So we are both heroes?” Cindy asked.

“Yes Cindy, you are both heroes,” Miss Bryan confirmed.

Both of the children were pleased.